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Moriarty, congratulations on a fine first effort. It left me thinking of many implications and the surrounding activities without describing all of them (a sign of good writing), and I actually felt myself rooting for your protagonist, meaning the character was not flat. For a short story, that's an achievement. I was reminded of two stories. One was "The Choice" by W. Hilton Young (1952) for an incredibly short story that leaves you feeling connected to the characters and thinking of all sorts of things afterward. You can find it here:

https://www.101bananas.com/library2/thechoice.html

The other was really hard for me to remember, but I finally tracked it down. It was "The Two Faces of Tomorrow" by James Hogan, here:

https://www.amazon.com/Two-Faces-Tomorrow-James-Hogan/dp/0345296605

In this book he postulates that humans want to create a sentient AI so they build a computer-run space station and then try to over stress the computer in order to stress it into sentience. Someone said it is very slow for the first hundred pages, but I remember the action toward the end, which my much younger self very much enjoyed.

By the way, I *loved* the Anti-memetic videos. What an interesting idea!

One more thing while I think about it. You mentioned recently that you had some ideas for removing excess iron from the body. That's a really hard thing to do, according to others, and sticking needles in my arm every other week is a no-go for me. I'm a typical modern man - I want something easy. Could you address the issue sometime, perhaps in a 'covering several minor issues in one note-covering post'? TIA. :-)

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I wish sub stack would let me 'like' some of these comments! I really liked the story and all of the compliments here are true. The music was a nice touch. I didn't expect that. If this was your first effort, you may have yet another career ahead of you! All success to you!!!

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